Date: 2007-12-27 07:32 pm (UTC)
Painful and powerful. This opens up the scene wonderfully. You use repetition particularly well, the way he keeps saying things as if it's going to change the outcome. I loved the way you linked to all the others he's lost through the goodbye kiss.
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