ext_61649 ([identity profile] catsfiction.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] rude_not_ginger 2007-12-27 07:32 pm (UTC)

Painful and powerful. This opens up the scene wonderfully. You use repetition particularly well, the way he keeps saying things as if it's going to change the outcome. I loved the way you linked to all the others he's lost through the goodbye kiss.

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